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Saturday, August 20, 2011

HE KNOWS TOO MUCH

    

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In addition to the four word prompt, Jenny has given us 150 words for this Saturday Centus!  Hooray!  Thank you Jenny!

HE KNOWS TOO MUCH

(Prompt:  If I die young)

     I’m sad that he knows too much, this eleven year-old son of mine.  He was too young to understand then, and we don’t talk about it now. I see him, sitting alone on the porch step, elbows on his knees and chin in his hands.  I’m sure I know what he’s thinking about, but I haven’t the strength to go to him. 

     After being informed that my husband was on a plane that crashed into the Twin Towers, my mother had to come take care of Matt for almost a year. 

     Sensing me at the door, he said, “Mom, if I die young, who will take care of you?”  

     I joined him on the steps.  “Is that what’s been worrying you?  Your Dad’s watching over us.  He’ll make sure you don’t die young. When you leave home, he’ll still be watching over us.”  We sat on that step for hours, finally able to talk.

    

    I’m so glad you stopped by. Go visit Jenny Matlock Off On My Tangent to find links for Saturday Centus.    Edited to add:  This is a fictional piece.  I’m so sorry to have misled anyone.  Laurie

 

17 comments:

Karen S. said...

Such a haunting story, may God bless you all.

Nonna Beach said...

Excellent !

There are so many stories and scenes like this one playing out since 9/11...heart wrenching !

cj Schlottman said...

Laurie,

I send to you and your young soon my deepest sympathies. Your piece is achingly touching and brought tears to my eyes. Good writing evokes emotional responses from the reader, and this is really good writing!

Namaste...........cj

laurie @ bargain hunting said...

CJ, I didn't intend to mislead. This piece is fictional. I'm sorry if I implied otherwise. laurie

Daydreamertoo said...

I think you need to add a P.S. maybe because I too thought it was a real event, so, I do think you maybe should add a note that it is fiction.
Sad story, good use of the centus prompt.

Madge said...

That was a great post, so real, great job.

beckyp said...

great use of the prompt It broght tears to my eyes

jfb57 said...

THere may well be someone who this refers to. It is a great piece of writing that ends with hope.

Judie said...

I'm sure this conversation has taken place many times between parent and child since 9/11. Excellent take on the prompt.

Rawknrobyn.blogspot.com said...

Believable fiction means excellent writing. Nicely done. This was somber and sweet.
xoRobyn

Dazee Dreamer said...

Beautiful. I got chills reading this.

Sue said...

Obviously well done, since so many thought it was true.
Nice job and so believable.

=)

Jo said...

what a heartbreaking story ... this was so dad, yet a bit sweet as well. Well done!

Anna said...

Great post! Well-crafted writing.
I am so glad that this is fiction.
I usually add a 'P.S.' when I write something that could be interpreted as factual. I made the same mistake on the anniversary of 9/11. I usually also write in the third person using the name of a fictional character, such as my alter ego 'Sanna'.

Best wishes,
Anna
Anna's SC Wk 68 'If I die young'

Tgoette said...

Such a sad and sobering tale of the emotional toll taken from one family in the aftermath of 9/11. Great take on the prompt! Well done!

Jean said...

Very nicely written. Well done.

Jenny said...

Oh Laurie, this was beautifully poignant and so moving.

Such a different perspective to write about 911 from. This made my eyes tear up. What a horrible time that was.

Thank you for linking.

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