For extra money, Herb’s Uncle Marty allowed him to clean the bar each night. One night, three gorgeous, scantily dressed women strutted through the door. One of them said, “We’re singers, and we’re here about a job. Herb shouted, “You’re hired!”
In Marty’s office, Herb explained he hired singers.
“Nobody sings unless I hear them first,” Marty exclaimed.
Herb asked the trio to sing. He covered his ears when their shrieking began.
Watching the girls lean over in their low cut dresses and shake their bottoms, Marty shouted “You’re hired!”
Astonished, Herb remarked, “Even shrieking sounds beautiful when it comes out of the mouths of babes.”
Thank you for hosting, Julia. I hope this is PG. Thanks to my visitors. I’m always amazed at the creativity and ideas that are shared when we all begin with the same prompt. To find links to read all of that creativity, click on Julia’s Place. Laurie
11 comments:
Ha ha ha.....that made me laugh! Very clever take on the prompt!
Made me laugh too - great story-telling.
Oh very clever, well done!
That's a good one. I can really picture Marty...sweaty, rounded (very), comb-over hair, bad breath... Great piece.
I just love the 'character' of your writing. I know I could devour a whole novel!
Yep, clever! Well done you. GSussex
Love it! The other sort of babes, this made me smile.
I was wondering if, second to last sentence, it would be even more surprising if the order of the sentence was changed:
“You’re hired!” Marty shouted, watching the girls lean over in their low cut dresses and shake their bottoms.
I didn't see this coming...so either way, it worked.
Ba-rum-bump! :) This was a funny, comedic take on the prompt, reminiscent of classic tv.
In terms of that next to last sentence, I think it was a good call to let us see why he hired the women before we see that he did. With just a hundred words, we have to create a few moments of suspense however we can. Right?
What a cheeky post Laurie! Thank you for taking the time to share!
Oh my goodness, this is FANTASTIC! I reminds me of the features like "Laughter, the Best Medicine" that I used to read in the Reader's Digest. Wonder if they still do that. I hadn't thought of it for years until read this.
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